>>108769
Hi once again, I'm happy that my advice is helping.
In terms of writing I don't have much experience (I apologize), but I'll try.
In the last two panels of the last file (the one with the ice cream girl), you could do something like this (see image attached). I don't know how to put this at all, but I think these extra bubbles should keep the exuberance and add a subtle amount of concern.
>>108771
Before I continue, I have some questions:
Why doesn't the ice cream take the hose out of her mouth if she wants to stop? Is it because she'll lose the contest and the prize, therefore has to suck it up and push forward? Or is it because the cream is so good that her
body doesn't want to stop?
I'll assume it's the latter because of what one of the fruit girls said ("it's hard to stop, once you start"), although this also leaves me with another uncertainty regarding whether they're allowed to fully stop the flow by using the valve or not (because it'd technically count as forfeiting). Talking about valves, where are the pressure valves located?
Anyways, I think she should go back and forth with concern and anger. The following is a short example I wrote (assuming the valve is next to ice cream girl's hand, and that her body doesn't want to stop). I doubt that this example fits with what you have already planned for the story, but it should help. Again, I'm not good with writing myself, so I apologize if it doesn't do a lot for you.
"Oookay - Whew, I've gotten massive. I think this size is good enough. Pig girl over there looks like she's about to give up" [Puts a hand on the valve]
"Haha... Hah... Why is it not stopping?"
"I'm getting so massive, too massive... I need to stop now" [attempts to move the valve]
"I - I said stop! Stupid thing, just stop the flow already!"
"Why is it not stopping...? WAIT-" [turns towards the valve, realizing her hand doesn't want to close the flow]
"Why am
I not stopping!?"
"I'm getting so fat... my mom's going to KILL me!"